Ariana Valentine

I actually really liked that, and I can see the format for it being like a tornado. I didn't really see any gramicarial errors either, but I think that I ...

wow, I really liked that. It had lot's of good rhyming most of the time. Very good flow too. But I actually don't think you need to add "the" before ...

The title really caught my attention with this peice, but I do have to agree that in the first stanza it sounds like the pen will be back, but in ...

That was good. I mean wow, I think that it really portrade a feeling, and I don't think that the rythme was messed up at all, or that it was ...

That was amazing. I don't think I've ever read anything like that, but wow, it was amazzing. Slightly cramped in the first stanza and really short in the second, but ...

Oh. My. Gosh. That was amazing. No joke, I swear that was so true that you have just made my day insanly awesome. I didn't notice any typo's or anything ...

Over all, I liked it. I can agree that it might have needed to have a little more to it. But it was consistant, and even though it didn;'t have ...

I found it! Thanks for the PM telling me about this. This defently adds, I dunno, It kinda makes you want to read more (I forgot what I was supposed ...

I thought that it was funny, all of the poetry I write is really I dunno, the oppisite of this, and I think that Its YWS has at least some ...

I thought that it was really good, I did notice that there was a few typos here and there, but honestly not that many. You gave good descriptions of the ...

I can honestly say that I will most likely never ever read another poem like this, but oh well, it was funny. And right npw I really need to laugh. ...

I love it, I think that the length of the poem is great too. I don't think you should change "in" and "dim", they don't exactly ryhme like they could, ...

I Liked it, some actual puncuation would have been nice. And added more flow. It was good, really, the idea of it seemed kind of Cliche, but it made sense. ...

I love the title. I just love it. And I don't think that it matters that it's a little but longer then the adverage title, I can't think of anything ...

Woah, that was good. It was very realistic, and how you had her like David, and having her have a best friend that seemed kind of crazy (my best friend ...